Term 1 2014 Written Language

WALT write a timed recount about a time when we did something special with our whanau or family.
Write about:
·      when and where you did something special
·      who was with you
·      what you did (think about the order you did things)
·      how you felt and why you felt this way.

By Max Ioane
My Sixth Birthday

On my 6th birthday I woke up. I went to see if mum was awake. She wasn’t there but there was a map to my mate’s house so I got dressed and biked to his house. I put my bike on its stand and knocked. No one opened the door. I was sure this was the right house I said to myself. Or was it 84. I was 100% sure that it was this house so I biked to 84 but then I realised it was my birthday. So I turned around and headed home and there was my family waiting all along so then I got ready and went to Chipmunks. That was the best birthday I ever had. Meanwhile I was in the car just asking “Are we there yet? Are we there yet?” I suppose it got quite frustrating so I stopped and then we got there so I got out of the car.

Next steps

Use more descriptive words to create a clear picture in the mind of the reader.

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